Thursday, January 2, 2014

Sketchbook Stories - Page 4

I think this will be the last page I'll feature on the blog before I move onto regular sketches on my twitter feed.

This was an unfinished panel where the story (and our cast of characters) were to be introduced.  Here's what the text says:

"How did my parents find out? (about having powers, etc) By the time I was born, we already had a test and shot that released my power in spurts until I can find some sort of control.  Doctors take away all the fun.  I grew up, different but not too different.  I couldn't join sports for obvious reasons and my parents found out of a school in a city full of 'people like me' that they wanted me to go to.  I got in, they were happy and now that's where I'm headed off to."

More worldbuilding, but I notice this writing raises more questions (not in a good way) than answers.  This was also at a point where I used commas instead of periods because I was lazy. I remember being happy about the buttcheek on the left, the "test."  But a lot of this part of the story isn't really there in the current version.  Still, if you go to my post where I showed the first page (in color), you can see some similarities between it and the central panel.

More to come tomorrow!


Wednesday, January 1, 2014

Sketchbook Stories - Page 3

No intro, let's just check out the page.  

This continues the long, long intro of the graphic novel, starting to get a little more dynamic in its frames.  I really like the last panel, and the right top panel - I think the posing is pretty good and it communicates fairly effectively what is happening.  The left side of the page is a little more muddled; my anatomy and perspective is pretty off.  I've also noticed that I'm much more line-heavy compared to now.  I guess since I'm mostly working with color, line takes less precedence that it did before.

Here's the accompanying text:

"But there were no superheroes, no villains.  Guess we're a bit more mature than that.  Like I said, at the beginning, if you were one of the lucky few, you just made money off of appearances and talk shows.  There were a few bad eggs who used their powers "for evil,"the random superpower who decided to be a cop usually put a stop to that.  There was undecipherable that random dumbass who overestimated his power and fatally realized that he's not impervious to bullets."

More cringe-worthy narration.  Full of cliches, writing that just goes on (when on a comic book page, you need to be as succinct as possible) and doesn't say too much else.  I like some of the ideas there, but the execution - poor.  

Join me tomorrow when I'll have the last page of Graphic Novel related sketching.